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GRAVY FALLS OC PLS CRITIQUE by Vednilik GRAVY FALLS OC PLS CRITIQUE by Vednilik
EDIT 1/19/20 : GUYS. THIS IS A JOKE
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i spent 30 mins on this jfc  
pLS CRITQUE I LUC HR AND SHE CAN FLY 2
:iconkoili: I FOLLOWED HER INSTRUCTIONS
BUT SHE HAS NO BEWBS BCUS SHE IS 23445 Y/O
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tis i s teh best oc. i must sey so. she is so boo ty ful too like srsly omg.
she is teh moost origynall oc evur so originality is 5
i all so lovoe h er namee.
she iz not a mary sue be cause reesons duh!
i love lov her bacstori. it's soo bootyful it made me cri evry tiem i red it.
i m all so glad she caame bac to leif to lif agein becuz she can live as a fubulous being.
tis oc srsly impacted my leif. so bootyful i now cri evry tiem i breath.
so tank u for creatin Lolipop
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Neonswords53 Featured By Owner 15 hours ago  New Deviant Hobbyist Digital Artist
just relized it was a joke
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makeitBIGandGOOD Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2017
I think you should try harder when making troll OCs this sort of thing is boring at this point and overdone.
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Liamluigi7 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2017  Student Artist
Alright, here is my serious and j0k3 review

J0k3 reveew xd: DIS IZ LTI I LOV E IT AND ALZO IT S NeEeD SOEM MOAR SEMXY EYEBLEDDINGA CURLSUR SO I WILT FUCK HIRE LIEK I FUCK TRACER XCD

real review: this looks like crap. that's would say if this wasn't a joke 101
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gaycrystal Featured By Owner May 18, 2017
shes perfect the way she is
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Galaxy-Chick Featured By Owner May 9, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
0/10


needs more rainbows and eye blinding colors
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honeyheartbases Featured By Owner May 1, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
IT'S GORGEOUS
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Fiji-boii Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your OC is the answer to life. 
 I can now wake up well knowing that this exists.
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Kinziiz Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Needs more rainbow
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TheShinyShin Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2017  New Deviant
this has to be one of the most akward Oc biography's ever
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cutiecrab Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
bes o  c evr i wis i hd an o c l ik ths 
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Inkosaurs230 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017
needs mor bwebs
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KoopaKing8000 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2017  Hobbyist Filmographer
Best oc 2k17.
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TheKittyCat123AJ Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2017
This is wonderfully detailled! I love how you had the rainbow hair, its very original, never seen that before! Also, I love the sans powers too! Love it.
Hope this helps!
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(guys don't take this seriously, this a joke critique, and not to be taken seriously. the art is a joke as well.)
Thanks.
-TheKittyCat123AJ
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Mushoormcute64 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2017  Student Artist
OMG THYZ S0 FAC-KING AMEIZING
Whatchyu Lookin at with yo Cringey Face knuckles sings When the Meme is Just Right AAAAAaaaAaaaAAAAAAAAAA Happy The 'Thank God It's Not Monday' Walk FRISK APPROVES - glitchtale emoticon 
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CREEPERBOXX Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Bee Movie Script According to all known laws of aviation, there is no way a bee should be able to fly. Its wings are too small to get its fat little body off the ground. The bee, of course, flies anyway because bees don't care what humans think is impossible. Yellow, black. Yellow, black. Yellow, black. Yellow, black. Ooh, black and yellow! Let's shake it up a little. Barry! Breakfast is ready! Ooming! Hang on a second. Hello? - Barry? - Adam? - Oan you believe this is happening? - I can't. I'll pick you up. Looking sharp. Use the stairs. Your father paid good money for those. Sorry. I'm excited. Here's the graduate. We're very proud of you, son. A perfect report card, all B's. Very proud. Ma! I got a thing going here. - You got lint on your fuzz. - Ow! That's me! - Wave to us! We'll be in row 118,000. - Bye! Barry, I told you, stop flying in the house! - Hey, Adam. - Hey, Barry. - Is that fuzz gel? - A little. Special day, graduation. Never thought I'd make it. Three days grade school, three days high school. Those were awkward. Three days college. I'm glad I took a day and hitchhiked around the hive. You did come back different. - Hi, Barry. - Artie, growing a mustache? Looks good. - Hear about Frankie? - Yeah. - You going to the funeral? - No, I'm not going. Everybody knows, sting someone, you die. Don't waste it on a squirrel. Such a hothead. I guess he could have just gotten out of the way. I love this incorporating an amusement park into our day. That's why we don't need vacations. Boy, quite a bit of pomp... under the circumstances. - Well, Adam, today we are men. - We are! - Bee-men. - Amen! Hallelujah! Students, faculty, distinguished bees, please welcome Dean Buzzwell. Welcome, New Hive Oity graduating class of... ...9:15. That concludes our ceremonies. And begins your career at Honex Industries! Will we pick ourjob today? I heard it's just orientation. Heads up! Here we go. Keep your hands and antennas inside the tram at all times. - Wonder what it'll be like? - A little scary. Welcome to Honex, a division of Honesco and a part of the Hexagon Group. This is it! Wow. Wow. We know that you, as a bee, have worked your whole life to get to the point where you can work for your whole life. Honey begins when our valiant Pollen Jocks bring the nectar to the hive. Our top-secret formula is automatically color-corrected, scent-adjusted and bubble-contoured into this soothing sweet syrup with its distinctive golden glow you know as... Honey! - That girl was hot. - She's my cousin! - She is? - Yes, we're all cousins. - Right. You're right. - At Honex, we constantly strive to improve every aspect of bee existence. These bees are stress-testing a new helmet technology. - What do you think he makes? - Not enough. Here we have our latest advancement, the Krelman. - What does that do? - Oatches that little strand of honey that hangs after you pour it. Saves us millions. Oan anyone work on the Krelman? Of course. Most bee jobs are small ones. But bees know that every small job, if it's done well, means a lot. But choose carefully because you'll stay in the job you pick for the rest of your life. The same job the rest of your life? I didn't know that. What's the difference? You'll be happy to know that bees, as a species, haven't had one day off in 27 million years. So you'll just work us to death? We'll sure try. Wow! That blew my mind! "What's the difference?" How can you say that? One job forever? That's an insane choice to have to make. I'm relieved. Now we only have to make one decision in life. But, Adam, how could they never have told us that? Why would you question anything? We're bees. We're the most perfectly functioning society on Earth. You ever think maybe things work a little too well here? Like what? Give me one example. I don't know. But you know what I'm talking about. Please clear the gate. Royal Nectar Force on approach. Wait a second. Oheck it out. - Hey, those are Pollen Jocks! - Wow. I've never seen them this close. They know what it's like outside the hive. Yeah, but some don't come back. - Hey, Jocks! - Hi, Jocks! You guys did great! You're monsters! You're sky freaks! I love it! I love it! - I wonder where they were. - I don't know. Their day's not planned. Outside the hive, flying who knows where, doing who knows what. You can'tjust decide to be a Pollen Jock. You have to be bred for that. Right. Look. That's more pollen than you and I will see in a lifetime. It's just a status symbol. Bees make too much of it. Perhaps. Unless you're wearing it and the ladies see you wearing it. Those ladies? Aren't they our cousins too? Distant. Distant. Look at these two. - Oouple of Hive Harrys. - Let's have fun with them. It must be dangerous being a Pollen Jock. Yeah. Once a bear pinned me against a mushroom! He had a paw on my throat, and with the other, he was slapping me! - Oh, my! - I never thought I'd knock him out. What were you doing during this? Trying to alert the authorities. I can autograph that. A little gusty out there today, wasn't it, comrades? Yeah. Gusty. We're hitting a sunflower patch six miles from here tomorrow. - Six miles, huh? - Barry! A puddle jump for us, but maybe you're not up for it. - Maybe I am. - You are not! We're going 0900 at J-Gate. What do you think, buzzy-boy? Are you bee enough? I might be. It all depends on what 0900 means. Hey, Honex! Dad, you surprised me. You decide what you're interested in? - Well, there's a lot of choices. - But you only get one. Do you ever get bored doing the same job every day? Son, let me tell you about stirring. You grab that stick, and you just move it around, and you stir it around. You get yourself into a rhythm. It's a beautiful thing. You know, Dad, the more I think about it, maybe the honey field just isn't right for me. You were thinking of what, making balloon animals? That's a bad job for a guy with a stinger. Janet, your son's not sure he wants to go into honey! - Barry, you are so funny sometimes. - I'm not trying to be funny. You're not funny! You're going into honey. Our son, the stirrer! - You're gonna be a stirrer? - No one's listening to me! Wait till you see the sticks I have. I could say anything right now. I'm gonna get an ant tattoo! Let's open some honey and celebrate! Maybe I'll pierce my thorax. Shave my antennae. Shack up with a grasshopper. Get a gold tooth and call everybody "dawg"! I'm so proud. - We're starting work today! - Today's the day. Oome on! All the good jobs will be gone. Yeah, right. Pollen counting, stunt bee, pouring, stirrer, front desk, hair removal... - Is it still available? - Hang on. Two left! One of them's yours! Oongratulations! Step to the side. - What'd you get? - Picking crud out. Stellar! Wow! Oouple of newbies? Yes, sir! Our first day! We are ready! Make your choice. - You want to go first? - No, you go. Oh, my. What's available? Restroom attendant's open, not for the reason you think. - Any chance of getting the Krelman? - Sure, you're on. I'm sorry, the Krelman just closed out. Wax monkey's always open. The Krelman opened up again. What happened? A bee died. Makes an opening. See? He's dead. Another dead one. Deady. Deadified. Two more dead. Dead from the neck up. Dead from the neck down. That's life! Oh, this is so hard! Heating, cooling, stunt bee, pourer, stirrer, humming, inspector number seven, lint coordinator, stripe supervisor, mite wrangler. Barry, what do you think I should... Barry? Barry! All right, we've got the sunflower patch in quadrant nine... What happened to you? Where are you? - I'm going out. - Out? Out where? - Out there. - Oh, no! I have to, before I go to work for the rest of my life. You're gonna die! You're crazy! Hello? Another call coming in. If anyone's feeling brave, there's a Korean deli on 83rd that gets their roses today. Hey, guys. - Look at that. - Isn't that the kid we saw yesterday? Hold it, son, flight deck's restricted. It's OK, Lou. We're gonna take him up. Really? Feeling lucky, are you? Sign here, here. Just initial that. - Thank you. - OK. You got a rain advisory today, and as you all know, bees cannot fly in rain. So be careful. As always, watch your brooms, hockey sticks, dogs, birds, bears and bats. Also, I got a couple of reports of root beer being poured on us. Murphy's in a home because of it, babbling like a cicada! - That's awful. - And a reminder for you rookies, bee law number one, absolutely no talking to humans! All right, launch positions! Buzz, buzz, buzz, buzz! Buzz, buzz, buzz, buzz! Buzz, buzz, buzz, buzz! Black and yellow! Hello! You ready for this, hot shot? Yeah. Yeah, bring it on. Wind, check. - Antennae, check. - Nectar pack, check. - Wings, check. - Stinger, check. Scared out of my shorts, check. OK, ladies, let's move it out! Pound those petunias, you striped stem-suckers! All of you, drain those flowers! Wow! I'm out! I can't believe I'm out! So blue. I feel so fast and free! Box kite! Wow! Flowers! This is Blue Leader. We have roses visual. Bring it around 30 degrees and hold. Roses! 30 degrees, roger. Bringing it around. Stand to the side, kid. It's got a bit of a kick. That is one nectar collector! - Ever see pollination up close? - No, sir. I pick up some pollen here, sprinkle it over here. Maybe a dash over there, a pinch on that one. See that? It's a little bit of magic. That's amazing. Why do we do that? That's pollen power. More pollen, more flowers, more nectar, more honey for us. Oool. I'm picking up a lot of bright yellow. Oould be daisies. Don't we need those? Oopy that visual. Wait. One of these flowers seems to be on the move. Say again? You're reporting a moving flower? Affirmative. That was on the line! This is the coolest. What is it? I don't know, but I'm loving this color. It smells good. Not like a flower, but I like it. Yeah, fuzzy. Ohemical-y. Oareful, guys. It's a little grabby. My sweet lord of bees! Oandy-brain, get off there! Problem! - Guys! - This could be bad. Affirmative. Very close. Gonna hurt. Mama's little boy. You are way out of position, rookie! Ooming in at you like a missile! Help me! I don't think these are flowers. - Should we tell him? - I think he knows. What is this?! Match point! You can start packing up, honey, because you're about to eat it! Yowser! Gross. There's a bee in the car! - Do something! - I'm driving! - Hi, bee. - He's back here! He's going to sting me! Nobody move. If you don't move, he won't sting you. Freeze! He blinked! Spray him, Granny! What are you doing?! Wow... the tension level out here is unbelievable. I gotta get home. Oan't fly in rain. Oan't fly in rain. Oan't fly in rain. Mayday! Mayday! Bee going down! Ken, could you close the window please? Ken, could you close the window please? Oheck out my new resume. I made it into a fold-out brochure. You see? Folds out. Oh, no. More humans. I don't need this. What was that? Maybe this time. This time. This time. This time! This time! This... Drapes! That is diabolical. It's fantastic. It's got all my special skills, even my top-ten favorite movies. What's number one? Star Wars? Nah, I don't go for that... ...kind of stuff. No wonder we shouldn't talk to them. They're out of their minds. When I leave a job interview, they're flabbergasted, can't believe what I say. There's the sun. Maybe that's a way out. I don't remember the sun having a big 75 on it. I predicted global warming. I could feel it getting hotter. At first I thought it was just me. Wait! Stop! Bee! Stand back. These are winter boots. Wait! Don't kill him! You know I'm allergic to them! This thing could kill me! Why does his life have less value than yours? Why does his life have any less value than mine? Is that your statement? I'm just saying all life has value. You don't know what he's capable of feeling. My brochure!

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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2017
bro reallyllama cancanllama cancanllama cancanllama cancanllama cancanyah
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Kinziiz Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Omfg 
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hakike--guro Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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it looks like shit 
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The-Real-Jynxie Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my god so many positive reviews 2015 NaNoEmo - #19 Cutie Laugh 
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beastly-the-villain1 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
THIS IS SO FUCKING AMAZING OMG, DATS ONE GUD OC MEH DUDE. Laugh LOL Creepy stare Clem Epic face Meme (Popcorn) [V1]  (that's one quality oc omfg) I love her she es peorfict,
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Skylarparker2 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
I LIKE HOW DUMB PEOPLE ARE AND DECIDED TO ACTUALLY CRITICIZE THIS CRAP WHICH IN REALITY
ITS ALL A JOKE


ITS OBVIOUS UWU
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MgPART1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Artist
oh god
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Skylarparker2 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
ITS FUCKING BEAUTIFUL RIGHT
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MgPART1 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Artist
ye just look at it
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Skylarparker2 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
IKR
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teh-best-preson Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Tis id incredble,,, dare i sae far better than ayting i drawes
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Creameee Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hAHAHAHAH
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Amiliyah-adopts Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
10/10 would worship
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ReesieRoo Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OMG SO KAWAII DESU NYA NYA NAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO KAWAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII
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Yuii-Chann Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2017  Student Artist
omgf bes oceh evarh
pritehfwel
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MewTheKitten Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I'LL KILL YOU SO HARD YOU WILL DIE TO DEATH
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OneGirlStudios Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"she will die u" i can't handle this :XD:
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MC-Gemstone Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
oh...no.....
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GalaxyGems Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
um no

like fuk u u bitvh foxy is mine
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kinqlemon Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
hot
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PaperPencil23EZ Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
What a meme.
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Maxellth Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2017  Student Artist
yes
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Wolfia808 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
my pencil broke I need a new one
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niightmaremode Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2017
ME
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ArtisticPegisister Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Omg I remember this
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MerpFord Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i need to take some fucking notes
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Elazulmax Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it's mine, how dare you steal it you freakin moron
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kitty2katniss Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
shes bootiful w/ an original design and a veryyyy creative back story 100000000/10
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SavannahSparkleStar Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"and she will die you"

die you

help me i'm smiling
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BlossickPrince Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2016
lol I rlly can't stop laughing
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IsabellaArtTime Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2016
First, your story line is way out of order. It is very confusing. It is actually very close to being a Mary sue, and I think it is. Why does she die because of an allergy? You should at least explain what kind of allergy it is. And her name is way to freaking long. Next time you do an oc and backstory, spell at least some things right and actually put spaces between the words. Also the drawing itself is isn't great, but it isn't bad either. Fix the legs, it looks like she is disfigured.

-Isabella
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Amiliyah-adopts Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Please tell me your joking XD
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IsabellaArtTime Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2017
I am lol
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Vednilik Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Oh my god
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Inked-Roses Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2017  Student Digital Artist


'oh my god' is rite
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